The Better Part Of Me

[IvanXLIV]

Hello all,

This is a little something I whipped up today while daydreaming about my lover; it practically wrote itself. Tell me what you think...


The better part of me
 
The better part of me dwells beyond the sea
In a far away land, an emerald gemstone
Cradled by waves of foaming lapis lazuli,
Glittering with an inner light all of its own.
 
Alas, ‘twas meant to be this way.
 
The better part of me burns bright and true, shining
Flame of boundless creativity, a dreamer
Of tremendous potential, always trailblazing
Way ahead of the world with nothing to stop her.
 
And in turn she inspires me.
 
The better part of me holds my heart in her hand
How could it be otherwise? She is my lover,
My dear soulmate, the one besides whom I shall stand
Come what may, lifetimes apart or joined together
 
For I love her with all my heart.

[Anallee]

(04-12-2016, 10:30 PM)IvanXLIV Wrote: Hello all,

This is a little something I whipped up today while daydreaming about my lover; it practically wrote itself. Tell me what you think...


The better part of me
 
The better part of me dwells beyond the sea
In a far away land, an emerald gemstone
Cradled by waves of foaming lapis lazuli,
Glittering with an inner light all of its own.
 
Alas, ‘twas meant to be this way.
 
The better part of me burns bright and true, shining
Flame of boundless creativity, a dreamer
Of tremendous potential, always trailblazing
Way ahead of the world with nothing to stop her.
 
And in turn she inspires me.
 
The better part of me holds my heart in her hand
How could it be otherwise? She is my lover,
My dear soulmate, the one besides whom I shall stand
Come what may, lifetimes apart or joined together
 
For I love her with all my heart.

IvanXLIV, this make me feel envious and alone.  So, job well done.  A beautiful and moving piece.  It's amazing what an altered state of consciousness, i.e. daydreaming, can sometimes accomplish.

[Cath]

You mean the best?

[Sharp]

(04-13-2016, 01:33 PM)CBM97 Wrote: You mean the best?

There is an English phrase for a partner or lover, where they are called the 'better half.' I assumed the title to be in reference to that.

[Cath]

(04-13-2016, 01:39 PM)Sharp Wrote:

(04-13-2016, 01:33 PM)CBM97 Wrote: You mean the best?

There is an English phrase for a partner or lover, where they are called the 'better half.' I assumed the title to be in reference to that.

Silly me, then!

[Anallee]

(04-13-2016, 02:22 AM)Anallee Wrote:

(04-12-2016, 10:30 PM)IvanXLIV Wrote: Hello all,

This is a little something I whipped up today while daydreaming about my lover; it practically wrote itself. Tell me what you think...


The better part of me
 
The better part of me dwells beyond the sea
In a far away land, an emerald gemstone
Cradled by waves of foaming lapis lazuli,
Glittering with an inner light all of its own.
 
Alas, ‘twas meant to be this way.
 
The better part of me burns bright and true, shining
Flame of boundless creativity, a dreamer
Of tremendous potential, always trailblazing
Way ahead of the world with nothing to stop her.
 
And in turn she inspires me.
 
The better part of me holds my heart in her hand
How could it be otherwise? She is my lover,
My dear soulmate, the one besides whom I shall stand
Come what may, lifetimes apart or joined together
 
For I love her with all my heart.

IvanXLIV, this make me feel envious and alone.  So, job well done.  A beautiful and moving piece.  It's amazing what an altered state of consciousness, i.e. daydreaming, can sometimes accomplish.

Together again!  Joyful and grateful.  This works both ways, good job sir.  You play me like a fiddle.

[RayL]

Great job Ivan

[Simple Tania]

fuck..fuck...Ivan..why you always make me cry?, damn you *grab a pile of paper tissues*

[Seiryu]

IvanXLIV,  Thank you for your poem.  You gave me something for my nightdreaming tonight.