02-26-2016, 04:21 PM
(02-26-2016, 03:34 PM)Fenix-TS Wrote: and let's move on, i'm loving your story so far, the only fix I do, is that you should have used a few stops on the narrative, using chapters for example, as this would have made it easier to read and track when we have to stop, that's all
Phyllis or heatround, I think you are a very good writer, you write with your heart and you know how to create empathy between the character and the reader, because I'm here cheering for her to be successful...
Thank you. *S*