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Earthquake - brandon1op - 06-02-2016
. Her love is like an Earthquake
Powerful and uncontrolled
When she wants me I turn my head
but when I want her shes with him instead
Our love is like a Earthquake
Dangerous and Merciless
Straight to the heart and the point
She makes me hunger for more with Every Rumble
There Love is an Earthquake
Wonderful and Free
I am free now away from the danger
I am a Cloud above all else
This is my first poem on here and its not about anybody In particuler "hides from the pitchforks"
RE: Earthquake - Sharp - 06-02-2016
I like it; it captures a part of how I've been feeling the past few weeks.
Welcome to the Poetry Club, Brandon!
RE: Earthquake - Lexirific - 06-02-2016
lovely poem, Brandorino
RE: Earthquake - Altaria - 06-02-2016
That's a nice piece
RE: Earthquake - brandon1op - 06-02-2016
THEY LIKE ME..THEY REALLY LIKE ME
RE: Earthquake - Simple Tania - 06-02-2016
Yes They Did Brandon, and so do I! I like it very much!
RE: Earthquake - Cuylie - 06-03-2016
I think my favorite line is "When she wants me I turn my head / but when I want her she's with him instead". The yearning in that statement is powerful and the rhyme couples them really well together, lending strength to the emotions that are portrayed.
RE: Earthquake - Lacivious - 06-06-2016
*hangs around with a pitchfork* Hey? I liked it... but i brought it just in case what can i say?
RE: Earthquake - Jackhole - 06-07-2016
Nice it's very espressive