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The Tank Killer. (My first short story I've ever written.)
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(01-16-2016, 10:09 AM)trainheartnet Wrote: Orion!  Hats off to you mate. The preciseness of ur writing made me imagine things in my mind.... Especially loved this paragraph

" A smile spreading across their lips as they thought they had got him only to then witness him groan and sit back up grabbing onto the handle of his gun, using his thumb to flip a switch activating a separate mechanism and twist it’s grip around as the top of the cross opened with a hiss while he began to stand with the long end of the cross over his shoulder now, he pulled the trigger and a large canister was shot out and smoke billowing out from it covering the street making him vanish from their view, he flipped the switch again twisting it once more to bring it back to it’s original setting as he took a deep breath and resumed his attack against the bandits as he aimed towards the tank’s treads, striking thin armor covering the left-side’s tread mechanism, they thought he was merely hitting their armor where it was the thickest allowing their normal smug nature to surface."
I'm glad you enjoyed it, I'll try to post something new in the coming year for ya.
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RE: The Tank Killer. (My first short story I've ever written.) - by Orion - 01-17-2016, 12:09 AM

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