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Night watch bay
#1
Lets try something. This is something I made just now, so I don't know how it will be. It will probably not rhyme so not my usual stuff

Last night I was with you
It felt like the best day of my life
I would have not imagined it
I would not wanted any other way

I missed being like this
I missed the feeling of a random kiss
I was reminded of your hazel eyes
Cause I couldn't keep myself away from your smiles

I wish it to be forever
I dream of us together
So don't go away
Let us hug on that eventful bay
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#2
Lady Altaria,

It doesnt need to rhyme all the time to be beautiful... and it is. A very heartfelt piece; I like it!

IVan
"Let my worship be within the heart that rejoiceth, for behold: all acts of love and pleasure are my rituals."
The Goddess -
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#3
I often find that by focussing too hard on rhymes, you lose meaning. As Ivan said, poetry need not rhyme, nor does it need a natural rhythm. When a river forges its path it has no set course, yet it still flows, does it not? The current may change, some parts may flow faster than others. Poetry is the same, and yours is always a river I eenjoy journeying down.
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#4
Thank you both and owww I love the way you described it sharp Tongue
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#5
Beautiful like always my dear Alt, and yes, my "nephew" is a real poet even when he isn't trying, poet soul that's what he have!!!
To be simple is to be great
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