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Elements (a fragmented story) - Shiroi Kurēn - 05-12-2016
Hey everyone,
I've been trying to get back into writing slowly, after an extremely long hiatus! So I thought some haiku inspired poetry would be a simple way to start my rediscovery. What you'll find below is a collection of four poems, in which you will hopefully see a larger picture evolve as you read through.
I hope you enjoy it!
Stone Heart
Cold and still numbness,
Hammer blows exert your will,
Upon the anvil
Your heartless actions,
Reckless labors of a craftsman,
Strongest stone shatters
My spirit unbowed,
Your ardor flags when revealed,
Bright diamonds inside.
Flame
Fire can only live,
When given something to burn,
Needing sustenance
Yet it is fragile,
Left unattended too long,
Flickers low and dies
Before embers cool,
Two sparks kindle anew,
A bright flame is lit.
Fluidity
Your hand holding mine,
An ocean cannot divide,
Thoughts flow together
How could she know?
Passion builds on rising tides,
Adrift in our love
Fate lets us recall,
A river bears two old souls,
Perfect harmony.
Flight
I know that smile well,
Yearning to roam far and free,
Winds picking us up
Meet up in our dreams,
Leave our world far behind us,
Breeze ever at our back
So come with me love,
Arrive to new beginnings,
Happy, wild and free.
A humble offering to my love, love you and I am so very proud of the bright soul you truly are! RE: Elements (a fragmented story) - Anallee - 05-12-2016
(05-12-2016, 06:29 AM)Shiroi Kurēn Wrote: Hey everyone,
I've been trying to get back into writing slowly, after an extremely long hiatus! So I thought some haiku inspired poetry would be a simple way to start my rediscovery. What you'll find below is a collection of four poems, in which you will hopefully see a larger picture evolve as you read through.
I hope you enjoy it!
Stone Heart
Cold and still numbness,Hammer blows exert your will,Upon the anvil
Your heartless actions,Reckless labors of a craftsman,Strongest stone shatters
My spirit unbowed,Your ardor flags when revealed,Bright diamonds inside.
Flame
Fire can only live,When given something to burn,Needing sustenance
Yet it is fragile,Left unattended too long,Flickers low and dies
Before embers cool,Two sparks kindle anew,A bright flame is lit.
Fluidity
Your hand holding mine,An ocean cannot divide,Thoughts flow together
How could she know?Passion builds on rising tides,Adrift in our love
Fate lets us recall,A river bears two old souls,Perfect harmony.
Flight
I know that smile well,Yearning to roam far and free,Winds picking us up
Meet up in our dreams,Leave our world far behind us,Breeze ever at our back
So come with me love,Arrive to new beginnings,Happy, wild and free.
Shiroi Kuren
You touch my heart and soul like no one other Beautiful in every way.
So very, very proud of and happy for you ~
Anallee ~
RE: Elements (a fragmented story) - Sharp - 05-12-2016
Stunning. Just stunning. You promised to post something, and boy did you deliver emphatically. I hope this is the first of many.
RE: Elements (a fragmented story) - Shiroi Kurēn - 05-12-2016
(05-12-2016, 07:46 AM)Sharp Wrote: Stunning. Just stunning. You promised to post something, and boy did you deliver emphatically. I hope this is the first of many.
Thank you for your kind words! It was a little daunting posting it up, it just feels so personal. Happy I did though, flattered and honoured that you liked it!
RE: Elements (a fragmented story) - Simple Tania - 05-12-2016
Really amazing Shiro, love it...just a small advice, the colour my dear, the first colour it's not easy to read and that's really bad...
RE: Elements (a fragmented story) - Lexirific - 05-12-2016
*gives Shiroi a lollipop*
RE: Elements (a fragmented story) - Shiroi Kurēn - 05-12-2016
(05-12-2016, 10:18 AM)Fenix-TS Wrote: Really amazing Shiro, love it...just a small advice, the colour my dear, the first colour it's not easy to read and that's really bad...
Thanks Fenix, I was actually looking at that first colour on my phone and thinking that it looked a lot darker than what it seemed on my computer screen. I'll edit it to something else when I can get back into my computer I think
(05-12-2016, 10:53 AM)Lexilicious Wrote:
Yay thank you, my first Lexi-pop! *unwraps and pops it happily in my mouth*
RE: Elements (a fragmented story) - Seiryu - 05-28-2016
Shiroi Kuren
I love this so very, very much. The pure emotion, love and progression of themes. Just a wonderful piece. I will keep this in my heart
Your love is truly fortunate to have you. ~
Seiryu ~
RE: Elements (a fragmented story) - Shiroi Kurēn - 05-30-2016
(05-28-2016, 11:30 PM)Seiryu Wrote: Shiroi Kuren
I love this so very, very much. The pure emotion, love and progression of themes. Just a wonderful piece. I will keep this in my heart
Thank you Seiryu, love is a two way street for it to truly work. Glad that you enjoyed it and took time to respond too.