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Wanting You - IvanXLIV - 05-25-2016
Hello people...
It's been weeks since I posted here; blame it on RL, mostly. The following poem, as usual, was inspired by my dearest Muse and the feelings of . Your comments are welcomed as always.
Wanting you
I miss you, angel of mercy flying above me…
Hours pass, falling down like countless grains of sand
Inexorably burying my heavy heart
‘Til I feel trapped in a windswept, desert wasteland
Named solitude.Spending a single day apart
From your tender embrace leaves my soul parched and dry,
Like crackled, dried mud under the merciless glare
Of the sun. Toiling at my daily chores, I try
Vainly to occupy my mind and block despair;
I need you, source of solace, goddess so heavenly…
Haunted by your smile, beguiled by your sweet laughter,
I see you everywhere behind closed eyes, yearning
For your presence. Even in my deepest slumber
I follow the trail of your dream form, embracing
The ghostly echo of your heavenly body,
Feeling the phantom caress of your lips on mine,
Whose pleasant aftertaste evokes pure ecstasy,
Soft promise of blissful pleasure oh so divine;
I love you, soulmate of mine, for all eternity.
Ivan
RE: Wanting You - Drek - 05-25-2016
very nice and lovely one Ivan, cheers
RE: Wanting You - Anallee - 05-26-2016
A wonderful and beautiful piece Ivan. I thoroughly enjoyed it and am feeling many of the themes in your poem today. So, timely for me also.
RE: Wanting You - Cuylie - 05-26-2016
I like the transition of flowing sand to the parched desert; of it's weight burying you. It was an evocative image and, well for me, the beginning part was the strongest part. (I enjoyed reading the whole thing as well!)
RE: Wanting You - Seiryu - 05-30-2016
Very nice IvanXLIV. I love the ethereal theme.