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The Lie of Life - Melificent - 05-20-2016

The Lie of Life


Men are props on the stage of life.
These are the roots of our world.
No matter how tender, how exquisite a lie will remain a lie.

Life is brilliant. Beautiful.
It enchants us, to the point of obsession.
Men are props on the stage of life.

Peace grants men the illusion of life.
Knowing this, do you still desire peace?
No matter how tender, how exquisite a lie will remain a lie.

Shackled by falsehoods unaware of its grand illusion.
How you grapple with this dreadfully twisted world.
Men are props on the stage of life.

All men trust fully the illusion of life.
What drives you so, to overcome this supposed curse?
No matter how tender, how exquisite a lie will remain a lie.

What is it that you seek?
You cannot even say yourself.
Men are props on the stage of life.
No matter how tender, how exquisite a lie will remain a lie.


RE: The Lie of Life - Lexirific - 05-20-2016

Trix!! Yay! That's amazing. I don't see why you were so nervous of writing.

RE: The Lie of Life - Sharp - 05-20-2016

Wow. Fantastic poem, Trix. A bit of personal pride for me that you did use the style I suggested. A great contribution.

RE: The Lie of Life - gomer - 05-20-2016

Amaing job Trix, so glad you are wrting as well!

RE: The Lie of Life - Simple Tania - 05-20-2016

Hi bella, amazing piece you wrote you are natural on that, please, keep amazing us with your poems

Big kiss

RE: The Lie of Life - RP_RICK - 05-20-2016

Beautiful words Bella, loved it

RE: The Lie of Life - EroticUdyr - 05-20-2016

Did you get inspiration from Aldia in DS2? ^^

Meeting Aldia at a specific place, this is what he says:
"Young Hollow.
How you grapple, without falter, with this dreadfully twisted world.

Peace grants men the illusion of life.
Shackled by falsehoods, they yearn for love, unaware of its grand illusion.
Until, the curse touches their flesh.
We are bound by this yoke.
As true as the Dark that churns within men.

All men trust fully the illusion of life.
But is this so wrong?
A construction, a facade, and yet…
A world full of warmth and resplendence.
Young Hollow, are you intent on shattering the yoke, spoiling this wonderful falsehood?"

Also, "Life is brilliant. Beautiful. It enchants us, to the point of obsession." is another quote of his.

Sources: http://darksouls2.wikidot.com/aldia-scholar-of-the-first-sin
At the bottom it says "show dialogues", I think you'll like it. ^^

RE: The Lie of Life - Melificent - 05-20-2016

Yes some lines, in fact most of it, is Aldias dialoque, i liked that one quote, and because this is my first try at poetry, I started doing something simple, and re-arranged and slightly changed quotes from a video game character I liked (Aldia from DS2) into a Villanella style.

I forgot to add that to the original post.

Hope nobody is mad about it^^

RE: The Lie of Life - EroticUdyr - 05-20-2016

(05-20-2016, 05:52 PM)Bellatrix Wrote: Yes some lines, in fact most of it, is Aldias dialoque, i liked that one quote, and because this is my first try at poetry, I started doing something simple, and re-arranged and slightly changed quotes from a video game character I liked (Aldia from DS2) into a Villanella style.

I forgot to add that to the original post.

Hope nobody is mad about it^^

Aldia is an amazing character, it's completely understandable. ^^

RE: The Lie of Life - Anallee - 05-20-2016

Very, Very Nice Bellatrix!  Powerful and moving Smile