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Three sisters - Cath - 05-16-2016
You can look through it, if you find any sense in it, please, write your thoughts.
Three sisters were watching the sunset,
The first was the youngest,
The third was the oldest,
The first years passed and they adopted a pet.
The second sister created a chair for the youngest,
The third made a cake the sick one, she's the best.
The first one looked at her sisters doing the rest.
The fourth year, the pet bites the first.
Three years passed, the dog was dead.
The second sister gave up her smile.
The third took a bullet after a mile.
The first passes, she has nothing, she said.
Two years passed, the sisters gave up their freedom.
The third got married.
The first got detained.
The second, she knows where the bullet comes from.
One year passed, the sun was still here,
Two sisters changed their life,
Three sisters were there when the sun appeared.
Fourth footprints were watching the after life
RE: Three sisters - Simple Tania - 05-16-2016
I cant think on anything to say, it's beautiful, well written, the message is there, if makes any sense? Life makes any sense?
RE: Three sisters - Cath - 05-16-2016
Nope. Life has no sense.
RE: Three sisters - RP_RICK - 05-17-2016
A powerful read. Indeed, little to no sense, still loved reading it.
Sometimes its just the way things are
RE: Three sisters - Cath - 05-17-2016
The structure of my poem was the main thing I focused on, the story on second thought and the rimes were the least of my problem.
RE: Three sisters - Tantrum - 05-17-2016
Hi Cath, is magnificent, just love the mystery tone, the message is there but you have to search it, it's beautiful and makes us think, great job!