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Shadows - Vrook - 10-20-2016
Shadows;
Clouding my sight that day,
Shadows;
When I saw you turning away.
I thought, that's it.
The time has come
For me to be again,
A whole, an one!
The moment I saw you
It grew in my heart,
That feeling of joy,
Of happiness, of trust.
And there I was,
Standing proud by your side;
Till that last moment,
When you told me, goodbye!
RE: Shadows - Hana - 10-20-2016
Very nice written!
If you're brave to say goodbye, life will reward you with a hello. _ Paulo Coelho
RE: Shadows - _Barbie_ - 10-20-2016
Whoooooooop !
Kudos
and : finally!
RE: Shadows - Cath - 10-21-2016
Is it because I friendzoned you?
RE: Shadows - TayYay - 10-21-2016
Ah.. shadows my old friend. As Frederich Nietzsche said about shadows as: "Thoughts are the shadows of our feelings - always darker, emptier and simpler".. Shadows are the reflection of one's own imagination, personified in how brilliant or how dark the person is
RE: Shadows - Drek - 10-21-2016
(10-21-2016, 05:17 PM)TayYay Wrote: Ah.. shadows my old friend. As Frederich Nietzsche said about shadows as: "Thoughts are the shadows of our feelings - always darker, emptier and simpler".. Shadows are the reflection of one's own imagination, personified in how brilliant or how dark the person is
That's true TayYay, (referring to one of my first poems) Shadows
And wellcome to the CW Vrook, simple but emotional, good work.
RE: Shadows - Vrook - 10-21-2016
Yes Cath! After all my love for you, the coldness in your reactions....
xD
Kidding. No, it was just a moment inspiration. I felt like I should try and put down what pass my mind.
I know it isn't so great, the rhyme is almost inexistent at some points, but I wouldn't call myself a poet, so it was just my second try at poetry.
Thank you for the opinions.
RE: Shadows - -J- - 10-21-2016
I liked it. Please post more, Vrook. :)
RE: Shadows - Vrook - 10-21-2016
Well, I'll try. But it might be a while till I'll come up with another poem, or story. Since I'm writing them on the go. I don't think about them, write them in advance or something like this. I just write what I think and what I feel.
RE: Shadows - Cath - 10-21-2016
Good! That's how I do it!
By the way, not every poem rhymes